Autobiographical Essay
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Name: Haley Hinkley __________________________________________________________________
PREWRITING
My topic is: When my dog ran away the day before Thanksgiving.
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The sights of the event:
Empty, silent backyard
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The sounds of the event: Crying, sobbing
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The smells of the event: my dog’s smell on our pillows and blankets,
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The feelings (touching) of the event: Hugging my family and my dog T-bone
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The tastes of the event: salty tears poring down faces
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My three body paragraphs are about:
1. My mom called me and said there was an emergency, she picked me up from my dad’s house, when i got in the car, my mom told me that my chihuahua named Dulce got out of our yard and ran away.
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2. We were all crying and sad but we had to try to find our dog so we walked and drove all up and down the streets and the cul-de-sacs, calling and yelling her name, hoping she would hear us and come. Then, we drove to Kinko’s and we printed out a lot of flyers. ________________________________________________________________________
3. We went around the neighborhood passing them out, and putting them at every doorstep under the “welcome” mat at every house that we saw. We also looked at many other places. There was a canyon type thing behind our house so we walked down in the canyon and searched and searched and searched, but still nothing, still no sign, still no sign of my chihuahua Dulce. We kept looking, not loosing hope. But we looked and looked for the longest time but unfortunately, we never found her. We had a tasty Thanksgiving but it was hard at the same time.
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(Some examples: the days/moments leading up to the event, the actual event, the impact the event had on you as a person, how the event changed your family or friends, how the event changed the community or world, why the event was important to you)
Thesis sentence: This event was one of the many most memorable events in my life. The loss of my chihuahua Dulce was very sad from my perspective. It was very hard to loose something that I loved. And still love today.
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INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH
Hook: (This pulls the reader into the story. It can be one sentence or a couple of sentences. Use imagery (descriptive words, words that describe the senses) to create a vivid picture of what you are writing about.
Hook(CD): Have you ever lost something when you least excpected it? _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail (your hook). How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it? It made me feel very sad and disappointed. My thoughts were changing a lot. Things were just running through my mind left and right.
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Thesis sentence: This event was one of the many most memorable events in my life. The loss of my chihuahua Dulce was very sad from my perspective. It was very hard to loose something that I loved. And still love today. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Body Paragraph One:
Topic Sentence (What is the paragraph about?)
The paragraph is about when my mom picked me up from my dad’s house and and told me that my dog was missing.
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Concrete Detail #1: (An actual event or fact)
My mother called my dad and said that there was an emergency. ___________________________________
(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail. How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it?
She rushed down to Pine Valley in her car and called my dad and told him to tell me that there was an emergercy. When i lefy my dad’s house and got in the car, my mom told me what was wrong and i didn’t belive her. I asked her if she was serious and then i got worried. When i heard that there wasa an emergency, i kind of got a little scared and worried. I felt sad and worried when my mom told me what had happended. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Concrete Detail #2: (An actual event or fact)
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(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail. How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it?
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Body Paragraph Two:
Topic Sentence (What is the paragraph about?)
The paragraph is about when we started to look for my missing dog. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Concrete Detail #1: (An actual event or fact)
We drove to Kinko’s and bought tons and tons of copys of the flyer.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail. How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it?
On our flyers that we got made, we put missing dog, her name, the date she went missing, a picture of her, and what she looked like. I felt better than before but i was still sad. I had hope and i was hoping that we would find her.
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Concrete Detail #2: (An actual event or fact)
We looked up and down the coldisacs for her and we looked in a canyons in the back of our house. We still look in other places. But still nothing. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail. How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it?
I felt hopefull when we went looking. We called her name many of times, oping she would hear us and come home. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Body Paragraph Three:
Topic Sentence (What is the paragraph about?)
This paragraph is about when we looked and looked everywhere for my dog but we still couldn’t find her. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Concrete Detail #1: (An actual event or fact)
We also looked in a canyon behind our house. We also looked at my grandma’s house because she lives close to us. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail. How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it?
This made me feel sad like before. Our neighboos also helped us look for my missing dog. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Concrete Detail #2: (An actual event or fact)
The next day was Thanksgiving, my grandma made us a great dinner. But i was still a little sad because my doggy wasnt with us. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail. How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it?
It was alright but i felt incomplete without my doggy. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH
Reword your Thesis sentence: This event was one of the many most memorable events in my life. The loss of my chihuahua Dulce was very sad from my perspective. It was very hard to loose something that I loved. And still love today. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(Com)mentary/(Com)mentary: Two sentences commenting the concrete detail (your thesis). How did it make you feel? What are your thoughts on it?
This very important event in my life was unforgetable. It was sad and disappointing.
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Concluding Sentence: (Leave the readers absolutely clear on what you wrote about. A last statement about the impact of the event would be effective.)
I will never forget this day. My dog never came back and itr made my family sad.
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